I need to fix your story. I'll do some editing. This will probably have more "power" to your story.
My version:
"Wow this is so clean for a server named Broken Lens!" I thought as I scanned the area.
There was a big tree with a large column. There were some people, whom oddly dissappeared as they tapped the stable "statues."
"Salutations, new player!" a snow golem exclaimed as he came out of the blue, "I'm the Watcher and out of my kindness, I'll give you an brief overview of Broken Lens!"
The golem hastily handed me a book and prodded around the tree.
"Yeesh its so pushy!" I thought.
"All the entities on the pedestals are NPCs. You can tap on them to join a minigame." The watcher points to an NPC looking like a detective, "This one leads to Murder Mystery, our most popluar minigame by far!"
Many players crowded around it and vanished in thin air as they tapped the NPC.
The Watcher looked flabberghasted, "Oh! I must leave now! I can't neglect my duties or I'll be taken to repairs again!"
"Duties?" I confusely asked, "You don't seem like you do anything"
"I do the most important job there is: making sure all players play fairly by tracking down modified clients in use!" The Watcher looked shocked, again and dissapeared leaving a mound of snow.
A random guy came up to me, "Hey! I see you're a newbie"
I turned around and saw him.
