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When she arrived home Marie rushed her sister into the living room for a chat.
“What did that devil say?” Marie demanded before her sister could ask anything. She moved her mouth up and down like she was talking. “Don't kid around with me!” Marie snapped and watched Zula sternly. Zula on the other hand looked frightened. She grabbed a notebook and pencil and scribbled on it. Then showed it at Marie. The paper said: ‘I can't talk…” Marie stared at the paper for a while then grabbed her sister’s hand. It was cold and was shivering like a kid in the cold that was crying before. She ran outside with her sister running beside her. Hand in hand they ran into the forest and Marie started talking.
“If you can't say anything… I'm going to look for Rosemary. You have to come. I know you'll come. Come on.” She ran off into the direction of the nest with Zula running close behind thinking about the devil. She had to stop the devil from killing or doing anything bad to Marie.
When she arrived home Marie rushed her sister into the living room for a chat.
“What did that devil say?” Marie demanded before her sister could ask anything. She moved her mouth up and down like she was talking. “Don't kid around with me!” Marie snapped and watched Zula sternly. Zula on the other hand looked frightened. She grabbed a notebook and pencil and scribbled on it. Then showed it at Marie. The paper said: ‘I can't talk…” Marie stared at the paper for a while then grabbed her sister’s hand. It was cold and was shivering like a kid in the cold that was crying before. She ran outside with her sister running beside her. Hand in hand they ran into the forest and Marie started talking.
“If you can't say anything… I'm going to look for Rosemary. You have to come. I know you'll come. Come on.” She ran off into the direction of the nest with Zula running close behind thinking about the devil. She had to stop the devil from killing or doing anything bad to Marie.
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But she still followed her sister closer and closer to nest. Finally, Zula arrived and found Marrie already climbing the tree. Marie in fact had reached the top. She felt around and felt a small paper envelope.
"Treehouse." It said. Marie rushed down before Zula could see and slowly but surly Zula followed still worried. What would happen to her sister? Her sister was running toward a treehouse in the distance and Zula didn't like this. The forest floor was getting more and more dangerous. With quick sand, bugs and even more Zula felt her shoes getting dirty. She didn't put her foot up to see, nothing. She just kept running along with her sister.
"Treehouse." It said. Marie rushed down before Zula could see and slowly but surly Zula followed still worried. What would happen to her sister? Her sister was running toward a treehouse in the distance and Zula didn't like this. The forest floor was getting more and more dangerous. With quick sand, bugs and even more Zula felt her shoes getting dirty. She didn't put her foot up to see, nothing. She just kept running along with her sister.
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Anyway, they finally arrived at the treehouse and in a maiden dress Rosemary answered the door. Zula heard Marie and Rosemary squeal and sighed to herself. Honestly, Marie didn't need her. That's when she heard a scream. She bounded up the ladders and peeked over the top to see the devil smaking Rosemary and pushing over to Marie.
"What did I leave in the nest?" He asked.
"What did I leave in the nest?" He asked.
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Marie was silent watching her friend rub her face in the corner, crying. The devil whipped his head around to Rosemary.
"Shut up." He snapped and locked her in a cell that happened to be outside. Rosemary stopped crying long enough for Marie to talk.
"A envelope." She snarled. The devil laughed his evil hellish laugh.
"Snooping in people's mails now are you?" He laughed his laugh again but Marie showed no sign of fright.
"Shut up." He snapped and locked her in a cell that happened to be outside. Rosemary stopped crying long enough for Marie to talk.
"A envelope." She snarled. The devil laughed his evil hellish laugh.
"Snooping in people's mails now are you?" He laughed his laugh again but Marie showed no sign of fright.
frostyfluxyt
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I thought you guys was same person xD because the name was similar(Aypifox->Typifox)
frostyfluxyt
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How do you get gold rank?
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It's a really good story, especially considering the time that it took you xD. I thought the plot was exciting, and one of those that always makes the reader think that the protagonist(s) is stuck with no options left, only for them to find a way to escape or solve the mystery. Which is hard to do, because basically you have to think of something that the reader hasn't thought of 
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Awesome story! It has a very interesting plot, and lots of suspense which makes the reader never want to stop reading. Keep writing, you're really good at it! 
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Good storie !