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Ice, Snow, and Blood
Part 1
Written by: Me! (@iifxllenrqse )
It was a crisp, frigid winter night. Me and my father were out hunting, with our bows in hand. We always preferred the old style way of hunting, using a bow and arrows. We always thought it was more enjoyable that way.
Our boots crunched loudly everytime we stepped on the snow, creating tracks that we could follow back home once we caught prey. But I was always worried we wouldn't be the only ones following our tracks.
As the night grew colder, so did we. My hands felt frozen in place as I gripped my bow tightly. My teeth chattered violently, sometimes I even bit my tongue and blood formed in my mouth.
"D-dad", I stuttered, talking becoming harder and harder as my lips and mouth became colder, "we s-should go b-back. It's too l-late now, all the prey will be g-gone."
"But Cassie, then we will return h-home empty handed, and we need food for the baby," he replied unsteadily.
"Right at the c-crack of dawn, we can come o-out and search for more prey, they'll b-be out by then," I muttered.
"I guess t-that's alright, let's start heading back then," he was about to turn around, we we heard the crack of ice breaking beneath his foot. We hadn't even realized we were walking on a frozen lake.
"Dad!" I shouted.
"I know, Cassie. It's okay, I'm just going to slowly turn around and-"
Suddenly the ice broke beneath him and he plunged into the ice cold water.
"DAD!" I screeched.
I heard no reply, so I jumped in after him. As soon as I hit the water, my body went into shock. I went to scream, but no sound came out. Ignoring the frigid water that seemed to stab at me, I dove down in the water in search of my father. I frantically looked around, but I soon ran out of breath. I bolted towards the gap in the ice, and threw my head above the water. I gasped and sputtered, but only stayed up enough time to get another breath of air.

I jumped in again, and again, but each time returning with no luck of finding my father. Tears sprang from my eyes, as I came to the realization that my father, was gone.
 
very good!

i love that you put in so much little details that shape the story

10/10
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I felt as I was in the story, my God, great work!

Love how you gave specific details on small events such as
Our boots crunched loudly everytime we stepped on the snow, creating tracks that we could follow back home once we caught prey. But I was always worried we wouldn't be the only ones following our tracks.

Ah, I wanna know what happens next, it's a pretty fantastic story and leaves me with a cliffhanger lol

I'm such a nerd to this stuff, great story tho! :o
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Amazing, I love the details. It described the snow so well OmgGg
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This is great’! I love the details and storyline Addy :)
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Omg, i was reading this in my quite room, and i felt like i was there!!! 10/10
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Part 2 is now released :)
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