Story 2: ~Chapter 1~ Flashback

That's cos they are weird mini geniuses.. o_e xD

But still, it's great xD
They'll be amazing writers and I'll be stuck playing minecraft trying to do somethin cooler. xD
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OH NO!! THREAD STALKER IS HERE! ;-; XD
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(I hope you like this, If you don't then at least, feel bad this took me an hour xD)
~At Wolfie's House~
(Pixel)" Why did tan even want to kill me?"
(Wolfie) "I don't know, but that was years ago, let's not worry about the past"
(Pixel) "Yeah, the memories were awful"
~5 Years Ago~
*Pixel opens the door*
(Pixel) "Come in!" *Her face was pale and she looked worried*
(Wolfie) "Really? I thought your gonna question me of why i came so late"
(Pixel) "Shhh!!! I just called the cops!"
(Wolfie) "Why? What happened?"
(Pixel) "Be quiet!"
*Someone Knocks On The Door*
(Pixel) QUICKLY!! Let's run to the back door!!!
*Wolfie and Pixel run to the backdoor and open it, they see someone else*
(Pixel) "Ok Lets go back!!!" *Wolfie slams the backdoor*
(Wolfie) "Whats happening??'
(Pixel) "Be quiet!!!"
*Wolfie pulls out a knife from his pocket*
(Pixel) "I'll get a knife from the kitchen!"
*Someone knocks the door harder until they started busting in, Pixel gets a knife and quickly runs back to the living room*
(Wolfie) "What do we do???"
*The door starts cracking from the bottom*
(Pixel) "Lets go to the bedroom!!!"
*They went to the bedroom and hid under the blankets*
(Pixel) "Shush, don't make a sound!"
*Door breaks open*
(Wolfie) Did the door break?
(Pixel) "Shh!! They will find us if you talk!"
*Police Sirens can be heard coming closer*
*Footsteps can be heard from the living room*
(Tantastic) Oh, I think I found you!
(Unknown Kidnapper) "Lets go! The police is here!!"
(Pixel) "Mmmph!"
*They run to the bedroom, Police Officers enter the house*
(Tantastic) I found them!!
*They pull out the blankets*
(Unknown Kidnapper) "We are doomed!"
*Police Officers run to the bedroom*
(Police Officer 1) "STOP RIGHT THERE!! Hold your hands up!"
(Tantastic) "You try to shoot me, I kill these people hmm??"
*Kidnapper whispers): Shoot him and let's get out of here, We will get caught"
*Tan Shoots the police officer and they ran through the backdoor*
(Wolfie) "What the?"
~Flashback Ends~
(Pixel) "Yeah I'm glad that's over"
*Wolfie Kisses Pixel*
(Wolfie) "I'll never let that happen"
*Someone knocks on the door*
(Pixel) Huh?
Great story! :D
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I liked the plot but there were a lot of plot holes, not trying to be rude but take this as constructive criticism cause it would make your story 10× better :D
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I reread it and I liked it even more ._.
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