Before School + You- Chapitre 6

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Chapter 6- Reflection

“Um,” Strel looked down at herself, feeling ashamed but also, frightened from what she just experienced.
“God?” She looked up like a complete idiot, looking like a drunk person talking to itself.
It only took a few minutes for Strel to realize that she was back in the real world.
Her cheeks were redder than the color red itself.
Strel was frightened from the nightmare she just had. She had so many questions but nobody to tell them.
Strel tried not to think about it that much as she headed for the breakfast area where she was forced to go with along with the other prisoners in the prison.
“Hurry up you-” I got poked with the stick the police were holding on my back. I was honestly disgusted on how they treat people in here, especially the women but hey, once again, I really can't do anything about it.

The breakfast place wasn’t exactly any better. I always ended up getting leftovers from the other day and always ended up sitting next to 2 dudes that haven’t showered in ages.
So, I always end up eating half of the food before headed for the trash can to throw up and that was that.

“W-where exactly are we going?” Bell asked while carrying her school books on her hands.
Miner was about to answer her question when Ang pushed Miner over and rudely said to her, “Alright listen,” she sighed, rubbing her eyes with two fingers.
“First of all honey, get RID of those books.” Ang shoved Bell as she grabbed her books and threw them into the trash can.
“You won’t be needed those anymore.” He claps her hands, getting rid of the dust.
“Second, if you’re going to be with us on this dangerous trip, then you gotta learn how to-” Miner finally shut Ang up by yelling, “That’s enough, Ang Middleton.”
Bell was shaking in fear as Ang looked directly towards Miner.
“Excuse me?” Ang starts to walk towards Miner like a tough dude ready to fight someone from the middle east.

“Whatever you’re about to do, I wouldn’t recommend it. Remember, I have more training power we both have.” She smiles as she crosses her hands.
Ang puts down the glasses that she was about to break from Bell.
“Suit yourself.” She throws the glasses back at Bell as she blinks.
“But, I do my things as I want, got that?” She points angrily to Miner as she starts to walk a passway where the floor was stone and the light polls were 10 inches apart from each other.
“Thank you, Miner!”
“Anytime.”
She helps Bell up from the dirty grass.
Ang is a nice girl, you just gotta learn how to deal with her… bad side. Miner helps her get the dirt off of her back.
“Yea, I notice.” They both smiled, holding hands as they rushed to Ang.

“They’re up to something.” Ham sits his coffee down next to Amanda.
“You think?” She raises her eyebrow, looking out the cafeteria windows.
They both take a sip from their latte, not looking at each other in the eye for a couple of minutes.
“You know,” Amanda puts her coffee down with her sleeves rolled up, “I saw what you and Evie did to Ang back there in the bathroom. Bad choice of move.” Amanda takes a bite from the strawberry donut she brought.
“Well, sorry for not being perfect. I wan-” Amanda cuts Ham’s explanation.
“You wanted to what? For Ang to bring up Evie’s and her past? Huh? Cause that could’ve happened.” She suddenly starts to lose control of herself and pulls Ham from the shirt.

“Listen, we didn’t come here to spend 8 hours of our pathetic lives every day to listen to people that failed to get a good job. We came here to find that orange guy in this building and stop those two,” Amanda heads towards the upper window where they spotted Ang, Miner, and Bell crossing the street from afar. “from getting her sister Strel out of jail. Got that?” She throws Ham onto the ground.

“Damn, since when did you get stronger?” Ham acted like he didn’t listen to what Amanda just explained.
“Hm? Oh, that. I have been taking some gym lessons after school every day. Though I hate it a lot, it does make me feel amazing nevertheless”

Ham heads for his backpack, scratching his head from the headache Amanda gave him, took out a mini box with a lock and key on it.
He inserted the key in the box, opened it and took out his switchblade.

“Let’s kill them.” Ham's eyes suddenly turned dark.

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Chaecters;

@~Ang~
@Thedarkminer508
@Strel
@xAmandax00
@SwettyBell98
@HmAm31

Still learning this paragraphing thing lol, I suck at writing
 
Suggestion:

Some text formatting would be nice, it'll make things easier to read in my opinion. If you want to, you can even colour code every character's dialogue to make it a bit more interesting!

Perhaps you can follow this simple suggestion to text formatting:
Bold - Headers, Footers, Titles, etc.
Italics - For character actions. Example: Knight: "You are all wrong!", he said angrily towards the crowd.
Underline - For author's notes
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I will keep that in mind for the next time!

Thank you!

But not color-coding, I find it rather distracting during the story. Yes, it could help some people to understand it better but it will be a rather big distraction for the story. Plus, I kinda don't like it.
But I will keep in mind the bold, underline and italics formats as they can be helpful towards other people.

Perhaps use different fonts for each characters? Similar to undertale.
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Perhaps use different fonts for each characters? Similar to undertale.
It could a bit messy but it doesn't hurt to try.
I'll see what I can do with that part but I think I'm going to stick to the old classic type if it doesn't work out well. But, I'll try it out today
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It could a bit messy but it doesn't hurt to try.
I'll see what I can do with that part but I think I'm going to stick to the old classic type if it doesn't work out well. But, I'll try it out today

Alright then, we'll see I guess. Thank you for taking my suggestions into consideration!
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