1 song and 3 poems I made....

Choose 2of the polls of which ones did you love the most?

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Here is the song... I wrote it in minecraft in a time when I was sad, READ THE WHOLE 2 PAGES!!
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This song is about my sadness...


And the poems:

  1. Every time I look at the ocean, I could feel what it feels. And its like I'm getting some of its peels, it ain't about dinner or meals, but also about worrying and tears.
  2. The sky is always blue, but at the same time... The world, that's what it drew. Along with space, it ain't just some grace.. It hasent been such a waste, even when you don't get a paste...
  3. When I see kids playing, I see them full of joy and happiness. But when it comes to break out, they start to shater with their grumpiness...
 
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TokyoPanda said:
I don’t understand why people should like writtings about being sad ;-;

They are very good, my favorites where 2 and 3
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Well, the most of the poems I read in school are mostly sad, and I wrote those at a time when I was sad.

And thx :3
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it’s really hard to make songs and poems so i congratulate you on that ! <3

but usually when writing songs , you make them rhyme so maybe go back and look over the lyrics : )

sorry , you can ignore my attempt at constructive criticism , but nonetheless , good job making 3 poems and one song ! :x3:
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x0EriBaka0x said:
Last poem is the worst one, and the song makes little sense
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CinderPuppyEyes said:
it’s really hard to make songs and poems so i congratulate you on that ! <3

but usually when writing songs , you make them rhyme so maybe go back and look over the lyrics : )

sorry , you can ignore my attempt at constructive criticism , but nonetheless , good job making 3 poems and one song ! :x3:
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ik, but this is just who i am thx :3
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XbamTheDutchAD said:
Here is the song... I wrote it in minecraft in a time when I was sad, READ THE WHOLE 2 PAGES!!
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This song is about my sadness...


And the poems:

  1. Every time I look at the ocean, I could feel what it feels. And its like I'm getting some of its peels, it ain't about dinner or meals, but also about worrying and tears.
  2. The sky is always blue, but at the same time... The world, that's what it drew. Along with space, it ain't just some grace.. It hasent been such a waste, even when you don't get a paste...
  3. When I see kids playing, I see them full of joy and happiness. But when it comes to break out, they start to shater with their grumpiness...
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That's not really a song, it's just the lyrics. You need to write the actual music part, with the notes on the trebel and bass staffs. I think there's a website that formats it for you.
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XbamTheDutchAD said:
Here is the song... I wrote it in minecraft in a time when I was sad, READ THE WHOLE 2 PAGES!!
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This song is about my sadness...


And the poems:

  1. Every time I look at the ocean, I could feel what it feels. And its like I'm getting some of its peels, it ain't about dinner or meals, but also about worrying and tears.
  2. The sky is always blue, but at the same time... The world, that's what it drew. Along with space, it ain't just some grace.. It hasent been such a waste, even when you don't get a paste...
  3. When I see kids playing, I see them full of joy and happiness. But when it comes to break out, they start to shater with their grumpiness...
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You can become a singer and a poet in my Opinion :)
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BlueWillow said:
That's not really a song, it's just the lyrics. You need to write the actual music part, with the notes on the trebel and bass staffs. I think there's a website that formats it for you.
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idc, but i dont rely care if its called a "song" or not.... but at least i sing it...
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